| Author | Topic: Bootlegger |
Total Posts: 19
Member Since: 2012 |  posted Saturday, June 16, 2012 10:25:18 PM 
I slip through the woods, I flip down the deep
river; paddle upstream, all cash and all creep
i rumble and i tumble, i weep in my sleep
until I come to my camp at the stream slope steep
Where apparatus was unpacked and set to distill
Contraptions for reactions crouch and hold to the hill's
base, not a race, just forty jugs for to fill
With crazypete's corn liquor: drink to dance the quadrille
dance with the daemons
dance with the dames
flip, spin and stumble
forget every name
forget every item
you ever did own
drink burning fire
forget every home
The fire's now burning; deep distill-AY-tion
Money I'm earning, fiscal reabilli-TAY-tion
The world is still turning, and copper kettle's bastion
Will serve to conserve this ethanolic triple ton
So drip drip drip goes azeotropes in the air
hoot goes the owl. crash goes a bear.
Slap the mosquito, but best to beware
Of the tax men creepin', for those not Savoir faire.
Not Savoir faire? Or fair as a maidenhead
Of the miller's daughter, drunk dead, spread on my bed
my elixer illustrates no injury; but son she bled
my vapors coalesce, now confess, that born or bred
i'm brewing like battle - whiskey
sour shake it like a rattle - misty
mountain now skeedadle - risky
to stand around like cattle but me,
just gonna sit here, splitting wood and tending fire
i'm quick to cut the fractions, coils with alcohol perspire
metabolic yeast reaction leads to dehydrogenase's ire
as the corn mash bubbles, and fills me with desire
to drink draughts deep, deadly and disastrous
dread doldrums depart with speed fantasticus
voice slur, vision blur, but you all gots to hand to us
the cask we carry hits you like a blunderbuss
Blunderbuss? Thunderous!
With aroma simply wondrous
Phenolic levels rise within each and every radius
Of fire and smoke, cough and choke, never broke
Took a swig, then a toke
Gotta go, flames to stoke.Partial IP: 189.229.87 |
Total Posts: 1903
Member Since: 2011
Location: curse my hubris, CURSE IT!!! | posted Saturday, June 16, 2012 10:30:49 PM
pretty creative. interesting subject matter. way i flowed it though sounded more like nursery rhyme. would have to hear to really feel i guess. like the direction and whatcha workin with. k.i.m.Partial IP: 17.237.100 |
Total Posts: 19
Member Since: 2012 | posted Saturday, June 16, 2012 11:05:29 PM
Yeah, that was what was said about the last piece I posted. Nursery-rhymeish. Either I'm in a rut, or this is simply all I can do. Need to try something different for the next one...Partial IP: 189.229.87 |
Total Posts: 19
Member Since: 2012 | posted Tuesday, June 19, 2012 12:38:29 PM
Thanks Cliff. Do you have a link to any of your stuff where you used similar rhymes? I wouldn't mind taking a look...Partial IP: 32.104.226 |
Total Posts: 19
Member Since: 2012 | posted Tuesday, June 19, 2012 1:26:35 PM
Didn't think that you meant you actually used the word "blunderbus", thought you just meant similar rhyme schemes.
Can't be too many cats ryhmin' with that word. Amazing ryhmes though. Thick and dense, complex, but flowed. And any reference to phosphorus acid gets points.
I still need to figure out how to flow better...Partial IP: 32.104.226 |
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