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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 2:34:18 AM Verse I Can't front... I made up tracks... Based from another experienced past... But my songs haunt me... little did I see... that My audio reflects my real family... I went... 25 years... steady cried tears Never had a mom then twenty ten cleared Set fear, is she dead? Guess here... Searched world web, but bets point to death here... ...And Then came a page, Typed was her name And with more fam, this shit was insane... It brought me to facebook, searched all names Messaged who appeared and played waiting games... So...
Bridge Be blessed who you are... Never act hard... Never get addicted And learn from your cards...
Hook Under Construction
Verse So a couple days flew, two of them were awry Then got a text "It's your uncle Wille... I Found my brother quickly, he got my number swiftly the Next day came, a michigan phone calls me... So I touched connect, god had me blessed Heard mom's voice, my awe wouldn't end So On we had went, many feelings shed Yea we both cried, the drama's pretty tense... October tenth, ...add three that was the day she con-tact me Told me she was a crack whore and left state Now proud of her, she been clean for a decade... and i'm 30...
Bridge Be blessed who you are... Never act hard... Never get addicted And learn from your cards...
Hook Under Construction
Verse Now I'm the first born son... call me lucky... Raised by alky's but not where the drugs be... Unwanted, till gramps took custody Didn't want me hungry, I knew that he loved me... But uh... back to my brother, clean for a year No meth/drugs, keepin it clear Learned I had a sister, and she saw fear... Wish I could find her and get the fam near... Then to my surprise in nineteen ninety nine When she was sixteen, I was eighteen right... She was laying by some train tracks, these words hurt... She was raped and murdered... raped and murdered...
Bridge Be blessed who you are... Never act hard... Never get addicted And learn from your cards...
Hook Under Construction
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coastEL
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 2:58:17 AM due to title almost didnt open.
bump as self reminder to read tomorrow am. 1
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Red Rayn
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 3:00:01 AM i actually wrote 3 verses for once and a bridge
im proud of myself
lol
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Red Rayn
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 3:27:56 AM Old stuff that ties into the creation of this song
"Deep train of thoughts"
One foggy afternoon I reminised the past What God took from me and how Satan whooped my ass Is it what I deserved at the pure age of 2? She focused on drugs to escape reality of a broom... Straws fell out, dust pans empty as my name Couldn't sweep it all, my emotions have dust remains... The last hoe used me, chewed me like Bazookas... The story of this (w)rapper graded me as a loser... The cooler in the fridge had always stayed empty On the couch alone two forties let me breath But what escaped my lungs was anger, I'm frustrated Feeling hated, No woman really wants me, grayness Circles my comic book, seize the clouded bubbles Destroy the one speaking im at the bottom of the funnel splash the puddles, spit mud in his face Sand in my eye, but I don't need to win this race...
Trouble lurkin in a quiet neighborhood riots flamed the wood that broke the silence and fixed up violence, staining roofs raining the roof was raimed too loose and paved with boots mud stomping from the touch of mister death'put scissors to the breath of a boys sister in instant death free ticket to rest and all it cost was flames encrypting her flesh no vision of techs, no gangsta like occurances that turned her in... into man made furnaces an ambulance... took ashley off the fast lane the black flames about to take ash's last name hell became the dip she was just about to dunk in and somethin... always stood in her way she would never sit down to get up - makin mistakes brother told her she had to get her shit straight but refused to let go of the drugs to escape...
Always askin for trouble and abused the word Life Everyday was a girls night, now tonights her last night the crack pipe was stashed in her blacked sights ash was too ashy to butt out these bad rights big bro by her death bed he was hurtin kid before she died, he told her don't worry sis you're gonna live old and be happy when you die IV hookups, praying stay alive Next thing brother saw was her screen flatline Ash don't die! I love you! the boy cried But little did I tell you their father next door Was left torn, and slept worn, strong knocks on deaths door The boy didn't care, his pops was never there Feelin scared, happiness impaired and took hold of the crutches screamin fuck this, wishin he had one wish to replace his sister... rest in peace ashley duncan
hmmm thought i had more...
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Red Rayn
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 3:35:15 AM Just glad i didn't kill the girl off in my songs with rape and murder, that would of really fucked my head up lol
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the real dick fitswell
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 10:37:14 AM sup rayn? Nice to see people I know doing stuff. This is good...
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coastEL
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 11:16:54 AM ok red, just finished reading those pieces.
from what audio ive heard you have a unique flow, that reminds me of something. not someone. something.
either case. i almost want to say i didnt like this, because it was so raw and personal. made me feel uncomfortable.
mostly due to familiar imagery and things.
but in all reality, this is the best written piece ive seen from you in my short stay here on da ughhz.
good drop, is there a beat your writing this too?
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coastEL
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 11:20:46 AM also, if you wanna give the battle league/tourney a run, let me know.
just not sure if we have enough regular posters to do it.
maybe a league play type feel. someshit
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Red Rayn
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 12:01:38 PM Well my mom flew into md for the week this past week and I learned a few things that just kinda struck me and I thought about my older songs and how they now relate to me when before they didn't...
I wrote it to "Point of View" by Life and Death productions, and playing with the words a bit i was gonna record to that riff raff beat
but yea...
far as the tourny, i don't have a problem running them, i just never ran one for said reason, and sometimes half the people don't even come through on their word after sign ups are done
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Red Rayn
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 12:07:55 PM I'll post a sign up sheet in a little while just to see what we have
i gtg now, catch you guys in a bit
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Red Rayn
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 2:24:33 PM think i need to edit my delivery in the 3rd verse...
other than that, might sound like im reading, this just to give an idea of what it will sound like..
just need a hook... i feel like someone should be singing it... i am not singing LMAO
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 4:11:03 PM i liked the subject like going through your past and trying to figure out who you are and where you came from, was interesting.
the first verse was the best tho lyrically and some of the lines didn't rhyme. touch this up a little bit and you got a winner.
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Criminal Mindead
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 6:05:23 PM felt. so much in fact thought maybe could give you a hand with the hook. just flipped what you said basically. lemme know what ya think. word
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 6:41:48 PM super serious you doods.
real real nice.
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Criminal Mindead
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 7:40:29 PM good looks coast, mic, aint even notice you said was gonna hook a hook up. do yo thing bruh. top it if you can...snicker
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Red Rayn
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 8:21:10 PM that's whats up, awesome crim, good lookin out man, felt the hook, might redo my 3rd verse, and do a few touch ups here and there on the rest and memorize it better
appreciated, respect
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Red Rayn
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 8:26:11 PM lovin the hook
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Criminal Mindead
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 8:30:55 PM word. wanna see what lio got for it but lemme know if ya need me to lay it down again after you tighten it up. k.i.m.
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Criminal Mindead
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posted Monday, June 18, 2012 10:57:36 PM coolbreeze stee. watch for the hook
posted Monday, June 18, 2012 2:34:18 AM 
