| Author | Topic: Wreck Fakes And Decorate Microphones Sometimes |
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Location: new york USA |  posted Friday, June 29, 2012 11:29:52 PM 
Wreck fakes and decorate microphones sometimes
With words from my own mind it’s not a crime
My bling is forever and it stringed together bold
Flow corrupt my rhymes like a donut got a hole
Through the middle cats think they Krispy Kreme
A raw thug, draw first blood like Rambo with extreme
Ammo, my brain keen but right now it’s drained of steam
For some reason wow we in the dumb season of summer
Many with wisdom get casted into any system then a number
Of them fail for lack of attention a whack dismention of society
Hidden at a party reaching for a written body of teachings variety
Of religious groups here dressed like rigorous troops wearing
A cross and sharing lost stories about their life and it’s tearing
Me apart, the DJ got me sniffing feeble vapors got legal papers
At my crib even an eagle tapers in flight over high skyscrapers
Hear some rude jive on the block just slop for livestock true pigs
You dig? My nerves and attitude should be served as food to big
HIPHOP lovers, my rap stands as I adapt plans to suit my skills
Help me become a brute ill in HIPHOP this stuff will thrill
And fill mind and literally kill online and handcuff cats shit
Slaughter with hype and like a water pipe kick it
While liquid flow through me, all types of wicked
Stuff, go through strife and do nice coping with it
This is an orchestra led by Barry White the music
Is very bright,t carry a tight beat others can use it
Rap shook and adapt books for dramatic representations
Lead an active life want an attractive nice situation
With a girl give her a gift with pearls lift dress and
Hurl kisses
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Location: The gods must die | posted Friday, June 29, 2012 11:34:23 PM
that title is awesomePartial IP: 169.158.36 |
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Location: I Reek Of Awesomeness | posted Friday, June 29, 2012 11:54:45 PM 
got me to read it. Not bad. Cool stuff...
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Location: in comes Phil Da Agony and his 5'1 | posted Sunday, July 01, 2012 2:25:30 AM
Me apart, the DJ got me sniffing feeble vapors got legal papers
At my crib even an eagle tapers in flight over high skyscrapers -- that shit was fuckin ill. nice visual.
I fucked with this a lot. Wondering how you would write a battle verse.Partial IP: 200.185.61 |
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Location: new york USA | posted Wednesday, July 04, 2012 12:28:56 AM
thanks you all for the feed on this one for realPartial IP: 254.210.32 |
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Member Since: 2010 | posted Thursday, July 05, 2012 12:43:00 PM
I think right around the middle of it was probably the best honestly. the begginning was so-so, but i guess it ended up working itself outPartial IP: 8.41.90.91 |
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Location: in comes Phil Da Agony and his 5'1 | posted Thursday, July 05, 2012 1:23:44 PM
"sounded forced" = a fancy way of saying I didn't actually read it but I'm gonnna hate for no reason.Partial IP: 8.8.45.231 |
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Location: aka Denis Thomason | posted Thursday, July 05, 2012 1:38:09 PM
sounded forcedPartial IP: .50.132.63 |
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Location: new york USA | posted Sunday, July 08, 2012 5:15:55 AM
thanks for the props on this one must keep doing thisPartial IP: 254.210.32 |
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Location: in comes Phil Da Agony and his 5'1 | posted Monday, July 09, 2012 12:28:57 PM
ok "forced" to me is when someone rhymes things just for the sake of rhyming, often making no sense at all
for instance:
i saw the razor blade with the gatorade
when the table made a label page
also forced might mean you're raping the language. could be construed as a good thing  Partial IP: 8.8.45.231 |
