you said you'd never leave me girl you're the one now you point your finger like you gotta gun sorry hon i love you but i gotta run leave it at that, whats done is done
you could never be mine on a one on one
lets ease the superstitions found a pot to piss in looking past all the kissing i would listen to your bitching now you fishing for admission on a mission for submission, i'll admit i'm hardly quitting no more fighting, no more crying, pack your bags 'n wash the dishes had enough of my envisions, so you vision better living better chances, belly dances, on a table do it pantless shake it for the masses while you looking for the answers i got the answers, i got the answers a wrinkle in time when the change is aligned the lethal combines of opposite minds see through your eyes and your obvious lies actions got you - passing on truth - keep your divine in your deviant prime at your evilist time bleed through your lines i'm like a fetus sometimes living off your care and genius crimes i'm a need me some time...
(C) 2012 M. Rodriguez
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Red Rayn
Total Posts: 10168 Member Since: 2001 Location: soundcloud dot com/redrayn
posted Monday, July 02, 2012 10:06:35 PM i will say one thing i love
your breath control EXCELLENT
im lookin for a pause in your verse and i can find one for a few bars in
it takes me off guard and gotta listen to it a cpl more times
seems like a dope track nonetheless
hook is straight but the only thing i woulda done different was match the notes on "what's done is done" with the rest of the hook, but it's cool i can dig
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coastEL
Total Posts: 2154 Member Since: 2011 Location: Wigger Slam Champ
posted Monday, July 02, 2012 10:44:18 PM this is like 1000 times better than the rough version you sent, or i think anyways.
good job man, soundin real offish as ushe.
like to get you on a few drops, gonna make a mixtape out the first 20 winners, might just end up lookin like a sab mixtape lol.
good looks on the re-mix.
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Sabotaj (Admin)
Total Posts: 457 Member Since: 2011 Location: bumpin some biz doin the mudfoot
posted Monday, July 02, 2012 10:45:01 PM nose jobs do wonders yo. i can dig it. you need ta holler for some hook work though. k.i.m.
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Lethal Weapon
Total Posts: 8020 Member Since: 2001 Location: 16 bars and counting
posted Monday, July 02, 2012 10:46:08 PM I c what ur saying about the done is done. Had to say it differently to stand out from the rest of the hook...
Kudos on the listen
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Lethal Weapon
Total Posts: 8020 Member Since: 2001 Location: 16 bars and counting
posted Tuesday, July 03, 2012 3:37:31 PM sab i think that i engineer some of the dopes hooks known to man
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Sabotaj (Admin)
Total Posts: 457 Member Since: 2011 Location: bumpin some biz doin the mudfoot
posted Tuesday, July 03, 2012 4:42:40 PM just offerin. my hooks are like the colbert bump ya feel me. it's like i can channel nate dogg.
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Red Rayn
Total Posts: 10168 Member Since: 2001 Location: soundcloud dot com/redrayn
posted Tuesday, July 03, 2012 5:37:43 PM ^truth
i need some white widow
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Sabotaj (Admin)
Total Posts: 457 Member Since: 2011 Location: bumpin some biz doin the mudfoot
posted Tuesday, July 03, 2012 5:41:40 PM me too yo. me too
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Sabotaj (Admin)
Total Posts: 457 Member Since: 2011 Location: bumpin some biz doin the mudfoot
posted Tuesday, July 03, 2012 5:55:26 PM and i'm just clownin and shit but good looks rayn
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K_wattz
Total Posts: 492 Member Since: 2010 Location: Turn Letters To Doe.
posted Tuesday, July 03, 2012 5:58:52 PM this is pretty nice
1st dude was nice and the singing in the beginnin was dope
u killt it too lethal on your verse; be careful about bunching words together; u didnt give yourself time to breathe at first but u pase well midpoint and the quality dont sound as clean as the rest; aslso gotts turn it down in sum parts; didnt like the it happened rapidy/ tragedy part.
overall good trakk with a good vibe to it.
pZ
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[ 0_0 ]
Total Posts: 355 Member Since: 2012 Location: There are actual demonic entities who control the world.
posted Tuesday, July 03, 2012 6:54:37 PM this iss dope
ounds mad professional
im lovin it
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Lethal Weapon
Total Posts: 8020 Member Since: 2001 Location: 16 bars and counting
posted Thursday, July 05, 2012 10:11:54 AM damn yOO this shit crankin'
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Lethal Weapon
Total Posts: 8020 Member Since: 2001 Location: 16 bars and counting
posted Thursday, July 05, 2012 4:10:05 PM No I'm not in the group but they are my brothers who I got into recording. I'm a soloist. Liotta when you say stop stealing your flow in the second half of my verse what do you mean? I have an original rap...
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the real dick fitswell
Total Posts: 12053 Member Since: 2003 Location: I Reek Of Awesomeness
posted Thursday, July 05, 2012 6:39:22 PM this is cool. While I'm more of a fan of samples and breakbeats, this sounds decent. Word...
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Lethal Weapon
Total Posts: 8020 Member Since: 2001 Location: 16 bars and counting
posted Thursday, July 05, 2012 9:33:05 PM Dopester
posted Monday, July 02, 2012 9:48:42 PM 
