| Author | Topic: The Gospel Whirls In The Best Of Possible Worlds It |
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Member Since: 2010
Location: new york USA |  posted Friday, June 01, 2012 1:35:28 AM 
The gospel whirls in the best of possible worlds it
Flow lame and proclaim we should give in and admit
That we live to win, now I’m here with a brisk crew
And fear this is true. It’s clear that there’s crazy glue
On my verse they’re quickly designed with sticky lines
Get props for this just by being an optimist in these times
Vocab spark like abstract art very confusing when using
Sophisicated verbs and words, got a clever crew amusing
We never knew loosing or skills could kill rap because it
Consists of lyrics that’ll twist spirits in the graveyard abit
Brave and hard got a cave in my backyard and it’s legit
An unknown yall at home and all but ran into a stone wall
After I made a phone call was putting my life to wrong use
That’s strong abuse tying a noose around my neck can’t loose
This knot gonna hang myself even though my slang is deft
My style corrupt and the flavor pile up like stacks
Of wood and all my facts are good and no maniac
Can battle this, my doom fate accumulate no room
For hate in my game, devastate the lame and bloom
Like flowers and take noon showers with zest soap
And write my best quotes at night this stuff is dope
Rejected and healing affected by feeling from rapping
Logic, my brain filled with words thrilled and mapping
Words with navigation systems fond of my skills so
I’m beyond ill in lawns this kill grass fescue go loco
a master on location ambassador in negotiations like
Parkay I butter words and utter verbs in a certain type
Of way its hurting to stay honest as my flow bounce
Try to pronounce the syllables and pour an ounce
Of wine, on the streets I believe if you seek and achieve
Success will come need influential friends to rcecieve
Essential wins got a menu and nervous that I can’t put
Into service, chase crews because I have a case of the blues
Squeeze strawberries and seize raw cherries so do’s
And don’ts about fruits wooden spoon to strain them
I became slim by eating them in the gym bruised my dim
Ego, cruise thorugh chapters and bruise rappers hype and
Fighting while typewriting words I have the type of plan
That leave posts on sights and experience growth by night
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Location: in comes Phil Da Agony and his 5'1 | posted Friday, June 01, 2012 3:40:13 AM
allright this started off kinda interesting then i wasn't really feelin the sticky lines when i first read it but
Get props for this just by being an optimist in these times -- you set it off with this line nicely
it seems like youre putting some things in there just to rhyme like brave and hard got a cave in my backyard and it's legit.
i mean ok i guess you got a legit cave dude, why rap about it?
My style corrupt and the flavor pile up like stacks
Of wood and all my facts are good and no maniac
Can battle this, my doom fate accumulate no room -- ok i like stacks of wood/facts are good but then i didnt know what you were saying
Like flowers and take noon showers with zest soap -- also i dont know why i need to know what type of soap you use, is that a product endorsement?
it seems like you put that in there just so you could rhyme it with best quotes, which sounds ok but its not worth it unless youre gonna do a lot more rhymes with it
Logic, my brain filled with words thrilled and mapping
Words with navigation systems fond of my skills so -- ok these two i like
I’m beyond ill in lawns this kill grass fescue go loco -- so i have never heard of a fescue, but i looked it up and apparently that's legit, so props for that but what the heck are you talking about here
a master on location ambassador in negotiations like
Parkay I butter words and utter verbs in a certain type -- these are ok
its hurting to stay honest as my flow bounce
Try to pronounce the syllables and pour an ounce
Of wine, on the streets I believe if you seek and achieve
Success will come need influential friends to rcecieve
Essential wins got a menu and nervous that I can’t put
Into service, chase crews because I have a case of the blues -- this section was the best
Squeeze strawberries and seize raw cherries so do’s
And don’ts about fruits wooden spoon to strain them
I became slim by eating them in the gym bruised my dim -- ok then all the sudden you talk about strawberries and cherries for seemingly no reason. and this last line is like um...what?
the last 3 were ok but doesnt really sound like an ending...
are you the guy that had the one piece that was all about gardening?
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Location: curse my hubris, CURSE IT!!! | posted Saturday, June 02, 2012 3:33:43 PM
that last line of your post flak seem like it should be a locationPartial IP: 131.92.115 |
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